Structural Edit

Read without a pen. Notice where your interest dips.

What is this piece about? If you can't say it, that's the first problem.

One sticky note per section, with its job in a few words. Lay them all out.

Reorder the notes, merge duplicates and remove sections that don't serve the summary. Then make the same changes to the draft.

Reread every join between sections and make each one flow.